So, I was super excited to see a link to the 4th annual No Kiss Blogfest hosted by the lovely Frankie Diane Mallis. (<---click the link to find the other No Kiss Blogfest entries)
I had so much fun last year, and got really excited to participate again this year.
And then I thought about my WIP. My very dark WIP during which my hero and heroine are separated for most of the book. :-/
And besides what I posted last year, none of my other mss have anything that would work. *sigh*
I could post a you tube video, or type out an excerpt of a great non-kiss from a favorite book (HEX HALL, anyone?), but I dunno. I just didn't want to do that. I even tried to write something, but that totally did not work.
So, I'm cheating a little. I'm posting a scene from my current WIP--a flashback scene of how the main characters met, which may or may not make it into the final draft. They don't almost kiss in the scene, but I think it has that flirtiness that is at the heart of many almost-kiss scenes.
It's a little long, but I hope you enjoy it. Leave me a comment and let me know, and don't forget to scroll back up and continue on the hop!
Inside, I shrug off my backpack and
unload the stuff from the store. Chrissy
must have heard me, because she comes in just as I take the carrots out.
“Hey, slow poke,” she says, grabbing a
cutting board.
My cheeks heat. “Sorry.
Class went over. I grabbed the
stuff at the store as fast as I could, although I did get distracted by a super
weird conversation with a guy,” I say, knowing the guy will distract her from
bugging me about my tardiness.
“Wait.”
She pauses mid-chop and turns to me.
“What guy? Tell me everything.”
Laughing, I tell her about the guy, who,
now that I think about it, was pretty cute, if a bit muscley for my taste. “So I was like, ‘Yeah, yum,’ and then I went
to get the rest of the stuff on your list.”
I wait for Chrissy’s comment, but she’s
silent. Surprised, I glance over at her
and laugh—she’s staring at me with her mouth open. “What?”
“You just left? You didn’t even smile at
him or anything?”
“Uh, no.
Why would I?”
She rolls her eyes. “Oh, Bree.
I guess I have to spell it out for you.
He. Was. Flirting.”
I burst out laughing. “Yeah, sure he
was. Over the yucca root. Riiiiiight.”
She waves her hand. “Not the most romantic place, I’ll admit, but
he was improvising.” Turning back to her
chopping, she mumbles, “I wonder who it was?
You said he was muscular and tall?”
I nod, closing my eyes to picture him.
“He had brown hair. Kind of wavy, but
not long. Just sort of shaggy, I
guess. And green eyes.” Really nice, piercing green eyes. I shake my head. If I say that out loud, Chrissy will hound me
to death. She might even go hunt the guy
down.
“And you thought they were football
players from Park?”
“They kind of looked familiar.”
Chrissy sighs. “What am I going to do with you, Bree? You have to pay attention.”
I snort.
“I was paying attention—to what I was there for.”
She shakes her head and finishes
chopping the vegetables. I help her
arrange them on a tray and pour some dipping sauces into bowls. She starts putting frozen taquitos on a pan
while I carry the tray out to the table.
I nod at a few people who say hey as I
walk by. It’s so weird for everyone to
know my name when I only know a few because I’ve only been here a little over a
month. Shaking my head, I set the tray
on the table. Chrissy had laughed at me
for suggesting a veggie tray, but given the way a bunch of people descend on it
as soon as I step back, I’m not the only person who likes a little variety in
the normal, greasy party fare.
Glancing up, I notice the ice bucket is
almost empty. I turn around to get more
and run smack into a large, muscled chest.
“Sorry!” I say, lifting my gaze to see
who I bumped into. “Oh.” Holy crap, it’s the guy from the store.
His green eyes spark with humor as they
meet mine. “Nice running into you
again,” he says. “I didn’t get to
introduce myself earlier. I’m Brian.”
“Uh, Bree,” I say. Oh jeez I feel like an idiot. “I, uh, need to get some more ice.” My cheeks feel like they’re on fire.
“I’ll help,” he says, turning and
gesturing me through the doorway back to the kitchen.
I cringe, but lead the way. I do not want to think about what Chrissy
will say when she sees Brian.
Increasing my pace as I enter the
kitchen, I hurry over to Chrissy and whisper in her ear. “He’s here—right behind me.”
“Who?” she asks, turning. Then her eyes widen as Brian saunters in,
leaning his hip against the doorframe.
“Hey, Chrissy. Did Pete bring the extra food in here
yet? We grabbed a few things at the
store before we came.”
“Yeah, thanks,” she says, then throws a
mischievous glance my way. “I heard you
guys were at the store.”
The corners of his mouth creep up, and
he turns his gaze to me. “You did, did
you?”
My cheeks must be the color of the
strawberries Chrissy is cutting up.
“Chrissy…”
But she goes on, just like I knew she
would. “So. Brian.
You can settle an argument for us.”
Her eyes twinkle. “Bree ran into
a guy at the store who sounded an awful lot like you.”
He nods, still staring at me. I can’t look away, even though I feel like
running and hiding.
“She told me about an exchange they had,
and I told her he was flirting, but she doesn’t believe me.” Chrissy is full-out grinning now.
My heart is pounding, and I have to lean
against the counter.
“Oh, he was definitely flirting,” he
replies.
Holy shit.
Chrissy nods. “That’s what I thought. Bree, why don’t you and Brian go get a
drink. I’ve got the food.”
Brian holds his hand out to me, and
without even meaning to, I take it. As
he leads me back to the table where the drinks are, I turn back to glare at
Chrissy. She just grins at me, and I
find myself grinning back.
Oh, this was so fun and flirty! Gotta love girlfriends like Chrissy-
ReplyDeletenice! Love that Chrissy got things rolling for her friend.
ReplyDeleteI like that you came up with so many different ways to say she was blushing. Awesome writing!
ReplyDeleteI totally want to know what happened in the store now :) Fun scene!
ReplyDeleteThat was really fun and I was laughing a little because I am totally dense in real life about realizing if a guy is flirting with me. Thanks for participating again!
ReplyDeleteYikes, I'd be afraid to tell Chrissy anything! This scene flows so smoothly and is so much fun.
ReplyDeleteLOL, that was great. Everyone needs a best friend like that.
ReplyDeleteThis is awesome. I love the light banter and the teasing and the embarrassment that seems like it will turn out well. Such a fantastic scene!
ReplyDeleteHello from the blogfest! Great scene! I like the upbeat pacing of your writing. I hope those two get to lock lips soon.
ReplyDeleteOkay. This was really cute--even if I would kill one of my friends if they did that to me. haha. REALLY liked this!! So glad I found you through the blogfest!! New follower...:)
ReplyDeleteSo, so cute. I love this, I love Chrissy and Bree's interactions, I love Brian. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi, Larissa! I'm a few days late in checking out the entries for the No-Kiss Blogfest, but late is better than never!
ReplyDeleteAnyhow, this was a fun read! Thanks so much for sharing with us! :) Even though there wasn't an almost-kiss, it was just as exciting. And, obviously, flirty lol. I want to read more, and see if any developments actually spark with Brian!
~Wendy Lu
The Red Angel Blog