Welcome to the Pitch On Workshop! When you have time before October 14, please take the time to go to the participating blogs (list here) and critique the pitches. All critiques will be entered to win either a 10 page critique or a query critique. (Details here). If you are interested in having your pitch workshopped, it's not too late to sign up!
Here's Stacey's Pitch:
Genre: Light Science Fiction
Seventeen year old Anamae accidently activates secret technology, which causes her to blink into and out visibility. Its use attracts an attacker, who she learns is an agent of a secret society. They suppress the knowledge of technology so advanced it could be straight from a science fiction movie. Now that she knows the secret, she’s at the top of their hit list. She must fight to keep herself and her family alive.
This sounds so intriguing! But it reads a little stilted to me. I have some fixes below, but I'd love more about who Anamae is and more of her voice throughout. More details about Anamae will help me connect to her and to your story.
What do you think? Leave your critiques in the comments! I'm sure Stacey appreciates your help!